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About My TFA story I'm Making and Meaning....

Journal Entry: Mon Jun 25, 2012, 10:28 AM
Okay, before i begin,

l'd like to say hi to my 3 bestest homies: :iconthundertigress: :iconsoniccouples10: AND :iconhotshotgirl: , who is my sister for life :D :dance: :w00t:

:iconlexiscreamer987: :iconsaysplz: :hesitation: SISTERS 4 LIFE HATERS!!

:iconhotshotgirl: :iconsaysplz: :hesitation: SHE GOT THAT DAMN RIGHT HATERS!!


(:iconkingdomhearts2345: isnt my bestest homie anymore cause i found out that she blocked me, and i did NOTHIING to her!! :grump: What a Jerk! :grump: )



:heart:                                         :heart:                                                          :heart:


Okay, now, I'm making a TFA story about this girl named Maddison :iconlexiscreamer987: (ME ^_^) who goes to school as usual with her friends:

Guy Friends: Shane, Keir, Connor, Trent, George, Elijah(sort of)

Girl Friends: Suni(sounded out like Sonny), Megan, Hailey(sounded like Haley), Alethea, and Josey(sounded out like Josie but she's only in for a little bit tho ^^;).


And they act up in class EVERY SINGLE DAY :roll: :giggle:
And yes, I have videos of how they act and look like as well :nod:
(Click here to the video(s) of how they act like ^_^:
www.youtube.com/watch?v=M7UTvC… &www.youtube.com/watch?v=x6h288… yes that IS REALLY how MY class acts like in school btw :laughing:


Okay back to the story, so after you have seen the videos of MY class and Maddison's, they act up like that, and then 3 months later, one day, the class acted up SOO badly(the 2nd Video), that the teacher Mrs. McKenzie called the Autobots to take in charge of them  :O_o:. So the autobots got the call from Teletran 1, and they went up. And then they saw how the class acted up and they thought it was CRAA-ZY. And then later they met their eyes on Maddison :iconlexiscreamer987:. And they wanted to know more about her so they hung out with her and she became their friend ^_^ and if you read the ''unfinished'' story link i posted below :below: it does say that too.

So yeah,

And I'm gonna need some help cause I'm still stuck at a part. Click here to see where i am so far:sta.sh/0135zyppjidy


So, if y'all got or have ANY ideas for the REST of the story and you would like to share it, you can either post comments down below and tell me what Y'ALL think should happen next, or you can go to my chatroom:chat.deviantart.com/chat/TheLe… and we can just either RP chat and i can put in what the transformers and the teenagers in the classroom would say and do, but it's up to y'all. Either way, it doesn't matter to me, but if you wanna chat about it, just send me a message or note saying you have an idea and you wanna RP chat about it, and i'll say yes :) OR you can just post me a comment on what you think should happen next.

Okay? Ight, Peace out Yinz and Luv y'all lots!! :D :bye:

  • Mood: Stuck
  • Listening to: Work Hard Play Hard by Wiz Khalifa
  • Reading: Nothing
  • Watching: Nothing
  • Playing: Xbox 360 on Live Gold
  • Eating: Starbust
  • Drinking: Lemonade
Skin by clipchip (modified by Lexiscreamer987)
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:iconjetomegatheautobot:
jetomegatheautobot Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Jet omega is in love with Optimus prime. Even tho she is small and 13 years old too and can change into a mermaid autobot and also a fighter jet too.
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Lexiscreamer987 Jul 31, 2012   Digital Artist
Here's info about Maddy:[link] ^^
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:iconjetomegatheautobot:
jetomegatheautobot Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And here is my info of jet omega please comment it ---> [link]
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Lexiscreamer987 Jul 31, 2012   Digital Artist
Could you too comment on Maddys profile pwease? :iconbeggingplz:
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:iconjetomegatheautobot:
jetomegatheautobot Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey can My TFA oc jet omega be in your story too as the jet twins little sister please
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Lexiscreamer987 Jul 31, 2012   Digital Artist
Sure, but can Maddy have a little crush on your brothers please? ^^; Cause I kinda AM a fangirl of them both ^^;
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:iconjetomegatheautobot:
jetomegatheautobot Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sure but I am very protective of my big brothers the jettwins
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Lexiscreamer987 Jul 31, 2012   Digital Artist
Okay ^^;
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Zormie Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Things you really need to work on is character development, plot, and writing.
The story plot could use a little work. Like having all the Autobots falling in love with madison and madison being a ' Ninja in training', would not sail well with others. People like a story that makes sense and has logic to it. Now I understand, this is Transformers, almost no logic, BUT you can at least make the human characters logical and not the center of attention.
The characters shouldn't be based off real life people and yourself, you should create your own characters. Take my comic for example. I do not know a october, jason or regan in reality. I just created them with the ideas I had for my story, nor are they the main characters. Just side characters. Another good example of character development is :iconbehindtg: she has amazing characters. Now she DID base 1 character off herself, but notice how the character, Jenna, is not a main character, More of a side character. You must also think about canon characters ( like bumblebee ) in the fanfic. Ratchet ( since it was shown he HAD something with Arcee ) and Optimus are good examples. They most likely would NOT fall in love with Madison, since Ratchet and Arcee are mainly paired and was almost called canon in TFA. Now Bumblebee I could imagine, but it's not good for a OC to fall in love with a main character. If the OC were to love say... Ironhide. That would make sense. Also inter-species relationships aren't the best for Fanfics either. SarixBumblebee is somewhat acceptable, since there is a large fan base whom believes Sari would've had a full cybertronian mode in season 4, if it were made. Plus 'Love at first sight ' isn't good for a fan fic. You must make the characters know each other for awhile, before they get together. The autobots also would never come to a school, just for a rowdy classroom situation. That should be the school board's job.
You should also try writing the story yourself. Not basing it off a roleplay. Also writing a fanfic correctly, not with emotes such as :) or :(. Try using words and sentences. Try and keep things focused on the plot too. Like the thing with Madison and her little sister fighting about xbox. That part should be left out. Also where the girls are talking about Madison's new earrings and whatnot. WFC and aeropostale would most certainly not be put in a TFA fanfiction, for they never were IN TFA. WFC is a completely different universe and aeropostale is a name-brand store that actually exists.

I hope these helped. Good luck on the story!
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Lexiscreamer987 Jul 19, 2012   Digital Artist
So,your saying I can just have one human character in my story instead of others? :) If so,I guess I will tow with that so it won't be as much :)

Thanks for the tips :) I'll remake it :)
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